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咲くその木
春風に舞う
緩めた手
抱きしめ止めた
探しても無駄

Saku sono ki
Harukaze ni mau
Yurumeta te
Dakishime tometa
Sagashitemo muda

This blooming tree
Dancing in the spring wind
The hand I've loosened
Ceased to embrace me
It's futile even if I search for it
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Given 2014-07-04
Spring is a season of growth, yet this is not what we sense in Te by ZetsubouDahlia.  This tanka is ripe with the symbolism shared between a fruitless friendship and an overreaching tree; from tree limbs to our own arms. ( Suggested by Nichrysalis and Featured by inknalcohol )
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Edited Jul 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
 This lovely haiku was featured 7-5-14 on Multhaiku's Twitter page, @GenreHaiku. :rose:
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ZetsubouDahlia Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
I'm very happy, thank you! There's a mistake in this post though, the title for this tanka is "te", which is Japanese for "hand", and on Twitter it's written as "Tea" :)
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, I think I may have misunderstood the title, then. I'm using screenreading software, so it pronounced "te" as "tea." I of course read the text itself both ways, but confused the title. I will see about editing it, if Twitter will allow me.
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ZetsubouDahlia Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
Ah, that explains it :D Have a good day :)
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely work and very well thought out ... congrats on the DD!
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scaredlittlewitch Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Student General Artist
あなたの詩は方法で私に関するものであり、私はそれが好きです。
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ZetsubouDahlia Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
ありがとうございます。
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scaredlittlewitch Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2014  Student General Artist
どういたしまして。
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PanzerFlight Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
...I could taste the over-rated from a mile away...
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Lady-Weavile-461 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Simply beautiful! :D
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naikki Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
Beautiful flow and imagery!
Just a typo in the english version..it should be "...I've loosened"
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Thank you, I corrected it :)
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Wyvern-1 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
There's something about Japanese lyrics, rhymes, and others that just...it's just surreal and indescribable. I just love seeing and hearing it. :)
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ZetsubouDahlia Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
I agree :) Japanese is a beautiful language.
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Aristanova Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
この作品は絶対に豪華です。:heart:
すべての単語が完璧に書かれている!

受賞おめでとうございます!
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ZetsubouDahlia Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
本当にありがとうございます!
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Iceemblem777 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
what do shime & temo mean in dakeshime & sagashitemo
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"dakishime" is a stem of a verb "dakishimeru", which means to embrace. "temo" added to a verb means roughly "even if [verb]", so sagashitemo means "even if I look for it" (although in Japanese person performing the action is not indicated by the verb, so sagashitemo may also mean "even if you look for it, even if we look for it" etc.).
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Iceemblem777 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014
What do you mean by stem? Why is the ru part omitted?
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Beltaneh Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
Very moving....
Congrats on the DD
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KaikoSensei Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lovely^^ congrats on the DD
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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
Gorgeous verse.  Congratulations on your DD! :clap:
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Dazbog1904 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice. I love Haiku Poetry
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RyuuseiSoul Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This isn't a Haiku though, neither in the Japanese nor the English translation. A haiku is a poem with origins in Japan that uses a structure of 5 syllables in a line, then 7 syllable, then finishing with another 5 syllables (which works much better in practice with Japanese than English). This poem is simply a lJapanese poem - a lovely one at that, but not a haiku. :)
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
Congratulations on receiving a Daily D feature for this piece ---
from one lover & writer of Tanka to another!
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ZetsubouDahlia Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
Thank you very much :)
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lorenavldz09 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So beautiful :iconsobeautifulplz:
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ZetsubouDahlia Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
Thanks :iconyuicryplz:
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lorenavldz09 Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Np :) uu do very good work dear
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Lucain24 Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing.... Nicely chosen and nicely done. Good job! 
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DeriveAnemone Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love this; I only wish I knew Japanese so I could appreciate it in its original language.
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cremep0ps Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
I like to read the second paragraph and pretend I know how to read Japanese 
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hissorihaka Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
very beautiful!
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ZetsubouDahlia Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014
Thank you :)
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hissorihaka Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome! :hug:
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Yagamiseven Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
very gentle
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Formel Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very good, I like that there's a story in here.
I think "te" means hand in Japanese, is that right?
But in Hungarian "te" means "you". So I thought it was fun, that the title also works for the Hungarian language. :)
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ZetsubouDahlia Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013
Yes, "te" means hand in Japanese. Well, in this case the Hungarian "te" is applicable too, and actually makes sense in this poem :) Thank you!
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